Monday, 11 July 2016

SE Storytime: The Mind Within the Head Within the Mind

quote [ I found it interesting when the world ended and I didn't. I had always expected there would be an end to my own life, but to be around to see all of it go was quite the surprise. It wasn't a spectacular end, full of fire and brimstone or the tearing of the fabric of space. It was more of a dulling, a fading out. The universe took its time ending. ]

Most recent short fiction I've written. I gave it a test reading last night at the revival of the anything goes open mic at Ong King in Chinatown, Honolulu. Full story in extended.

Title was inspired by a Bertrand Russell thought experiment.

The first draft was written in one sitting from beginning to end with minimal editing, so my next step will be to isolate the core of the story and the character and develop those. (Personally, I feel like the pacing is off, and the ending comes too suddenly.)

Please excuse any spelling/grammar errors, I haven't gone through it with a fine toothed comb yet. Any other feedback is very much welcomed. Also, feel free to post anything you've written or are working on in the comments.

THE MIND WITHIN THE HEAD WITHIN THE MIND
Reveal
I found it interesting when the world ended and I didn't. I had always expected there would be an end to my own life, but to be around to see all of it go was quite the surprise. It wasn't a spectacular end, full of fire and brimstone or the tearing of the fabric of space. It was more of a dulling, a fading out. The universe took its time ending.
We all noticed it at first in the night sky. The stars slowly blinked out a farewell, until one night you walked out of your house, looked up at the sky, and saw nothing but the oily blackness of dead space. When the sun didn't rise the next morning, we knew it was close. I watched the mountains go, from peak to base. The trees next, into the dirt, dirt into roads, roads to the beaches, beaches to the oceans, and then the horrible blotting out starting at our feet and working up the body.
My neighbor lay down on top of my car, letting the car go first before her. She was trying to delay the inevitable. I had had the same idea. I was sitting on my roof watching her. I closed my eyes and waited for death. Several moments passed and I no longer heard sound, not the song of the birds nor the hum of the electricity, and no breeze. I opened my eyes and I was alone. I thought I was dead, but I was still breathing. Surely dead people don't require oxygen? How is their oxygen?
I was still sitting on my roof, but it was a mere patch of it surrounding me. I had no more than a step or two to move in any direction. There didn't appear to be anything outside this space. Why was this space still existing? Why was I existing? Is this what happened to everyone else? Maybe my neighbor is still on my car in a space of her own? Are we going to die like this? Do we just wait and starve to death?
Death didn't come. Days passed. I waited. Weeks. I sat, I stood, I paced in the small circle I had to myself. I reflected upon my life. I wondered if this was some kind of karmic punishment for my past faults and transgressions. Maybe this was the for that time as a kid when I drowned that cat. I was giving it a bath, and I knew better than to be dunking it under the sudsy water for so long, but I kept doing it, kept laughing at its choking, sputtering sounds. When it went limp in my hands I instantly regretted it. I ran crying to my mother. She thought it was an accident.
Maybe it was an accident, maybe I'm remembering it wrong. When I grew up I spent time volunteering at animal shelters in some sort of attempt at repentance for what I had done. It didn't seem to help, I still thought of the cat on many occasions, and it twisted a nerve deep inside me to make it impossible to feel anything. Numbness took over and I regressed deeper into myself. I started working from home, I stopped calling the family, I never learned my neighbor's name. She was quite attractive and I tried not to stare at her when she was watering plants in her garden. Sometimes I stared, sometimes I didn't.
Why did this happen? Why couldn't the sun explode and evaporate us all instantly? Why couldn't a meteor have just smashed us all in one stroke? This was the end with an absence of death. It was worse than death. I lost track of time. I didn't age. I didn't thirst or hunger. Nothing smelled, or sounded, or tasted. I couldn't touch anything but myself and the roof. The walls, if you could call them that, seemed to exist but no matter how many times I held my hands out I couldn't feel them, and nothing would let me move past them. It was force unlike anything I can describe. Neither here or not here, much like my existence seemed.
I couldn't quite lay down flat, so I curled into a ball and closed my eyes. I tried that for I don't know how long. I didn't sleep and I was never tired, so I just thought about everything, anything I could think of. I grew bored with what I already knew and started teaching myself new things. I had all the time, because there was no time. I could afford to make mistakes in my thought process, I could just go back and try another of infinite routes. I figured out Calculus pretty quickly really, or so it felt. I figured out Molecular Biology and Theoretical Physics. I memorized everything I could, my brain could handle the information. Everything I could think of that I remembered, it was somehow always conscious in my mind. I could think better.
I started inventing new ideas. New structures, new maths, and new physics. It really helped pass the time. Sometimes I'd get stuck on an idea for what must have been centuries. Eventually I'd find that breakthrough and keep progressing. I felt invincible and omnipotent, but in the back of my mind that nagging voice would crop up, the same one that had reminded me of the drowned cat, only now it would tell me that it doesn't matter how far I evolved or learned, I could never share my knowledge with anyone or anything. It was a useless pursuit. I didn't pay the voice mind on most occasions, but sometimes the dread of my predicament, of having unlimited mental power but no outlet to really use it for, would draw me down into such a vortexual depression it would take me several years to pull myself out of it and continue my mental activities.
I think it was right around the time I figured out how to communicate with electrons, and watch photons simultaneously as particles and waves, that I noticed a change in the space around me. It seemed to fill up and form the shape of the area. A cylinder that I was standing in. I looked up and saw the "ceiling". Permeating the changed space was everything. A mixture of light, matter, and emptiness. If I looked closely, I could see the infinite gaps in the space. I noticed the gaps in the walls. I reached my hand out and pushed into one of the tiny gaps. It stretched out and around my hand. I could feel it now, it was like dipping my hand in bowl of aloe vera jelly, I swear I could even smell it. I pulled my hand out and it was gone.
I was surprised, but I didn't scream because it didn't hurt. I could clearly see the layers of skin, muscle and bone protruding from the tip, but it didn't bleed. When I looked closely I could see the particles of matter at the very edge of the tip wriggling around, reaching out for something. I used my other hand to scoop some of the changed space around me and held it down over my severed wrist. The particles grabbed hold of the space and it grew. It grew and grew, so I scooped more and it grew more, and in less than four hours I had a new hand.
It somehow felt superior to the old hand. It looked perfect. Immaculate. It was strong, I could feel its power. I ripped a tile off my roof and crushed it in my new hand. It made me laugh to see the fine powder fall from my clenched fist. I wished my neighbor was there to see my awesome strength. I always saw her going out on dates with big, muscular guys, but they must have been duds because she always returned home alone. In the five years I lived next to her I never once saw her go to bed with another. I wonder if she was as lonely being with others as I was being alone with myself?
I thought of the space she had occupied before getting swallowed up by the end. I looked in the direction it had been in. I squinted my eyes, imagined I could see past the wall and beyond. A vision of my car appeared, but it was blurred by the wall. I spit in my hands, rubbed them together, dug my fingernails into the wall, and pulled with everything I had. I could see the gaps in space stretching. I kept pulling, I wouldn't let them swallow me. I pulled hard. They stretched more. The wall began to give way. It tore and I saw the car, just a stone's throw away. I looked closely but she wasn't on top of the car. I ripped a hole in the wall so big all the changed space start pouring out of it into the nothingness. It created a path all the way to the car, like a solid flowing river of energy.
I jumped off my roof and onto the path, which held firm. I ran to the car. The windows had been tinted so I would remain unseen by the world when having to drive to the store or the bank. I tried to open a door but it was locked. I thought for a second, and reached into my pants pocket. My keys were in there. I snorted. I had been in that prison for untold ages and yet had never thought to check my pockets. How odd. I also found my wallet, a receipt for the new shoes I was wearing, and a small locket I kept with a picture of my mother in it. Her smile looked so bright. I didn't smile anymore. Maybe I could practice with my neighbor if I could find her. I slid the key into the door lock and held my breath. I turned the key and heard the lock pop. I pulled on the handle and opened the door.
She looked so beautiful sitting in the driver's seat, she was exactly as I remembered her, only her face was frozen in a mixture of terror and acceptance. So sad looking. I frowned. I called out to her but she didn't move. Maybe she was catatonic. Maybe she couldn't handle all this time and nothingness and went insane. I tapped her shoulder. She blinked and looked over at me. I smiled. She started crying. Her tears looked like aloe vera jelly. It crawled down her cheeks and fell in piles down her legs and onto the seat. I was about to ask if she was okay when she grabbed her head and started screaming.
The changed space was still pouring out of my cylinder like a waterfall, and it had filled up the small area around the car and quickly rose up until it reached the door of the car and began pouring onto the floor. It was touching her feet and her feet were turning black. Something like smoke, but also like floating rain drops, exploded from her skin. She grabbed a hold of me and screamed for help. I tried lifting her out of the seat but her feet were stuck in the changed space. I bent over her lap and tried to scoop the changed space off her feet. As quickly as I removed it new space came in and filled the gaps. I shouted angrily. I shouted long and hard. My voice reverberated off the changed space, causing it jump up and down in small spurts, like it was changing frequencies. I yelled louder and the changed space turned green. It became aloe vera jelly. I could see through the transparent jelly that her feet were still there and appeared to have healed. I told her it would be alright. I pulled myself up to look her in the eyes and reassure her of my power.
Her head was akin to a grapefruit being stepped on by a skyscraper, and then chewed on by various small creatures. I gasped. She was dead. I mean, she was dead dead this time. Had I killed her with my voice? I slammed the car door shut. I couldn't look at her like that. She had probably been okay by herself in the car, maybe not happy but at least she was still alive. I screwed up by trying to help her. The voice in the back of my head came back, told me it was the cat all over again. I had bathed her in my vocal emanations and held her head under them for too long. I was a monster. I punched the car, it dented slightly. I had to right this. I had to. I crouched to the ground and held myself. I could make this right, if that voice would just shut up! It kept going on about the cat now. I decided not to run from it this time.
I stood up and asked the voice to show me the cat. I felt something walk across my foot and looked down. There it was, rubbing against my leg. I bent down to pet it, but as soon as I touched its fur it hissed and fell apart into changed space. I stood back up and addressed the voice once more. I asked it how to bring my neighbor back to life. Its response surprised me for being so simple. It told me in order to do that I would have to invent life first.
I walked back to my cylinder. By this time, the seemingly unlimited changed space pouring out of it had filled the space between it and the car to the point that I could jump up and grab the ledge of my roof, and pull myself up on to it. I chanced a look back at the car, the changed space now almost entirely enveloped it. Hopefully, my neighbor was safe inside. Hopefully, the changed space couldn't squeeze through the cracks in the doors. When I got completely back inside the cylinder I grabbed the sides of the tear I had made and pulled them back together, sealing the hole. The changed space began filling back up the cylinder. There, at least now she was safe from being destroyed by it.
I curled up in the fetal position, the one I had grown to feel most comfortable in when thinking. I thought about the single-celled organism. In my mind, I scanned its every infinitesimal part. As deep as I could probe, I understood its entire structure and how each part combined to make the whole, as well as being a reflection of the whole itself. I memorized every possible interaction each part could have with the others. I ran rigorous tests on the cell to see how it reacted in different environments. Then, when I was sure the cell was perfect, I split it into two cells.
It was amazing. It felt like another me was born. The voice inside me even split, one continued to mock me but the new one encouraged me to do it again. So I did, and there was four. The other two voices chimed in, one saying I was wasting my time, the other saying I had nowhere to go but everywhere. I kept splitting them. By the time I had reached billions of cells in my head, I couldn't discern a single individual voice from the cacophony of sound in my mind. It became more like a hum, like electricity surging through my nerves. I felt alive again.
I opened my mouth and puked out a stream of cells. They bonded with the changed space and formed new matter. I grabbed some of the matter and found it easy to form it into amoebas and germs. I kept fiddling with them, puking more out as I needed them. I made mold, fungus, then plants. Once I had fish down, insects were easy. I kept going. I didn't stop. Four billion years passed, I had evolved enough to be consciously aware of time passing. I moved it through my creatures, aging and younging them at will.
When I was sure I was ready, I made a human cell. I grew it, split by split, into a fetus, then a newborn, toddler, child, teenager, and adult woman. It was my neighbor. She opened her eyes. I smiled at her. She smiled back, thanked me for creating her. I felt my heartbeat for the first time in as long as I can remember. The first beat disintegrated the cylinder. The second beat exploded light all around us. The third beat changed the light into matter. Everything started to reappear. My house, the car, the neighbor's house. The street and the neighborhood, the trees and the mountains and the clouds and the sky. It all came back just as I remembered it. I told the neighbor I did this all for her. She didn't respond.
I turned back to her and she wasn't there. She was at her house, back in her garden. I smiled and tried to take a step toward her but I was stuck. I couldn't move my feet, like they were adhered to the roof the way her feet had been stuck in the changed space. I called out to her but she didn't hear me. Didn't see me. A man walked up to my house, waved to her. They started talking. Who is that? I looked closely at their moving lips. He told her they would have the house sold in no time. My house? Sold? Why? I'm right here! She mentioned it was so weird how her neighbor just disappeared like that. No trace. Am I the neighbor? But she knows I'm right here! I brought her back. I brought all this back. He shrugged and said that was life sometimes. I called out to both of them. They did not hear me.
This was my fate. I took a breath. Why did I still need to breathe? It was obvious that this was it. I would stand here the rest of it, the rest of whatever is to come. I watched the house get sold. I watched her finally take someone to bed. She married soon after. Had two beautiful children. When she was too old to garden anymore, her husband passed. The last time I saw her was when her kids were taking her to a nursing home, a for sale sign out in her lawn. The moment she drifted from my view, my feet unstuck themselves. I lied down, curled into the fetal position, and wept.
[SFW] [do it yourSElf] [+6 Good]
[by JWWargo@10:33pmGMT]

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Onix said @ 11:01pm GMT on 11th Jul [Score:2]
Good to have you back.

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The raid
By José Carlos Martínez
ORAL REPORT ENTRY
22/12/56
Hssssssssss.
Lieutenant Magritte recording, hoping that someone will find this recording and
play it, perhaps before I decide to do something about my life … Sorry if I get
too personal, but in my situation I don’t really give a shit about what people think about me.
How to start? … Hell, let’s start with this … Sigh.
Whatever brought me here, and I don’t mean this hellish place but my career,
has no importance now. Money, fame, sex, whatever. This is not the place I
wanted to be in the end, that’s for certain.
The box I found, how could it even do this? This sky, this ground. Even the
sun. This is not a place I’ve met before, and I am certain it’s not in the Solar
System. And the dam box took me here.
The air feels different, heavy, like it’s rotting, like it’s dead. Where the fuck I
am? I have no fucking idea.
I have no comms. No radio. Nothing. How can I get outta here? I am even
afraid to walk and see what’s around. All I see are these black towers and
torrents of people coming. How did it happen?
Sorry, I have to come down, this is a report after all. Maybe it will be found
someday, next to my rotting body or in a pile of monster shit. I’ll be methodical
and provide as much detail as I can, perhaps too much and too personal, but
like I said before, I don’t care, sorry for the bad words and the lack of etiquette, but I don’t think that matters a lot right now.
Okay. Here we go. The ship landed on Pluto as usual, no activities, nothing
special. Just us and the planet, frozen as always, save for the hot spot on the
surface. We had changed the landing area in order to check it. On a planet
of moving icebergs and eternal cold, something as hot as five Celsius is worth
checking. But had we known … Ah, it wouldn’t have made a difference anyway.
Okay, so … The drones were sent and returned with nothing, save for the last
one. And that’s when things got weird.
The images. Something big and black as Hell, moving. Janick said it was
Godzilla and we laughed, because that thing on the screen could not be real,
it had to be interference of some sort, a small iceberg perhaps. And then the
satellite did not show any images. So the damn thing was not real. And we
kept telling ourselves that it wasn’t even when the ship was cracked open by
tentacles and we were being killed and eaten like peanuts in a bowl.
We hid in the escape pods and waited for the damn thing to eat us. And didn’t
happen. Mora and I waited and feared for the worst for what seemed like hours
while we tumbled, like leaves in a hurricane. And when we came outside the
pod I felt like I was waking from a bad dream. The ship was torn to pieces and
spread in a circular pattern, and in the middle … ridiculously small, was this box, this damn black box with patterns on it. And I took it. I guess that was the most stupid thing I could have done, but after what happened in the end, it would have made no difference if I took it or not. I put it inside the suit’s compartment and forgot about it for a while.
Mora and I walked to the base. Four hours under the dark, deep in the upper
area of the so-called “Heart.” We were freezing, and the batteries were emptying fast. The temperature was barely enough to keep us alive, and we kept on walking to the base. We should have landed there in the first place, instead of checking on the hot spot, but like I said before, perhaps it would not have changed anything.
In any case, we were following orders, and like it happens in the worse times for explorers, miners, and cops, we were following orders when tragedy fell upon us.
I kept seeing dark shadows looming above us, and I even thought I saw something flying, sometimes covering the light of the stars. But I knew that was impossible since the atmosphere was not thick enough to allow something to fly on its own power. And yet, I kept on seeing things.
And when we finally found the base on the distance, Mora and I almost jumped with joy, and we would have done so if we had enough air. As soon as we got into range we called on the radio, asking for help and to report what happened.
And nobody answered.
Another hour and the first symptoms of inhaling carbon dioxide were already
clouding our brains, but we kept on walking, holding each other like little girls,
when we finally reached a hatch and entered.
As soon as the airlock was closed and air began to flow the entry chamber we
removed our helmets and began to breathe in the air. I fell on my knees and
Mora fell heavily on her back, with her empty tanks keeping her from hitting her head.
We stayed there for maybe an hour and I opened the door to the base. And
the smell inside made me choke. When you’ve been in the army like I had,
you recognize the smell of burnt meat, human meat. They called it “long pig”
smell. And I had never smelled it in such a concentration. Doors were torn,
walls were broken and in the promenade, a pyramid made of blackened human
skulls awaited for us.
Mora lost it and opened her mouth as if to scream when we saw them. They
were humanoids, covered in what seemed blood-drenching human skins, chewing on bones. And rioting like birds, above their heads, long-necked things with wings, flying in and out the base, through its broken dome.
And the dome opened, not to the cold skies of Pluto, but to a reddish mass of
clouds which smelled like sulfur and brimstone. “Hell,” I said in amazement and half not believing it. But that wasn’t Pluto’s air we were breathing because that would have killed us in seconds. That was the sky of another world.
The creatures didn’t seem to mind us, and they regarded us with a lazy stare
that I recognized as the one someone has after eating too much and not having any interest in more food. Their bellies were distended to such a point that they seemed about to break, and perhaps fill the promenade with half-digested human remains.
Mora and I moved slowly towards the warehouse and as soon as we got inside
I began replenishing our oxygen tanks. We had another walk ahead of us, this
time to the hangars. The plan was to reach a trans-Neptunian space station or
even a moon.
“Inna, what has happened?” the poor girl asked me. She looked so frail and
small in her suit and I felt something moving inside of me. They always told that me I saw Mora as a daughter, but I knew better. I was in love with her and in that very moment, my throat felt like a giant hand was squeezing it and I was unable to answer.
“Inna?” she asked again and I had to rely on my training to calm down and try
and provide an answer.
“I don’t know. It is like something opened, a door to somewhere else. That thing that attacked the ship, it came out through it and returned. It’s in the hot spot area. And when it destroyed the ship and left … The damn box!”
I remembered the box, inside my back compartment. I opened it and took it
outside. I was able to see it under the light for the first time. It was as big as a
human head, a perfect cube, with intricate patterns on its black surface. When
I touched it, some of the patterns felt like moving, suggesting buttons of some
sort.
“Maybe it’s a key. They used it to open the door and come here.”
“But why here?”, she asked.
“Because there are not many of us here? I don’t know, but we have to contact
some other outposts and tell them about it. Maybe this is happening somewhere else. As soon as we make it to a ship we will call them from there. I don’t want to risk ourselves trying to reach comms with those things out there,” I said.
“They are eating our friends,” Mora said, with an unexpected coldness.
“There’s nothing we can do about it now,” I said and filled another set of air
tanks.
After a while, I opened the warehouse’s hatch to its pressure chamber and we
went outside, hoping to find a ship. Half an hour later we were ready to hop into one and I was glad to find that it had not been harmed. And this time, I really saw those things flying above us, apparently not very interested in doing us any harm.
“They fly on their own,” I thought while wondering at how they were able to resist the cold outside and maneuver as well as they did inside the base.
When we entered the ship I used the network to call all the outposts and Earth.
I radio called and sent the telemetry of our suits as well as accessed the logs of
the base and our destroyed ship and transmitted them. And I made the mistake to peek into the base logs.
I saw a light in the promenade area. And then people just started to hurt each
other. I saw friends I knew for years hurting others, jumping and biting their
faces like animals. I saw them tearing their clothes apart and their skin changing into black, their bodies drying and becoming the humanoids we saw. I saw the dome breaking and big black tentacles entering, and what seemed like glowing red eyes piercing the darkness.
I saw the monsters flying over those who remained human and were killed and eaten, and then I threw up on myself. Mora had arrived at that very moment to see what happened and I turned off the screens and changed into fatigues.
After exiting Pluto’s gravity and entering deep space we received a confirmation from Jupiter-5, acknowledging the signal. I remember the face of the comms officer talking to me, with his eyes wide open and his face, a face I had only seen in war, when survivors went hysterical or in the middle of a PTSD attack.
I bet that man also threw up on himself.
We acknowledged back and then minutes later we were ordered to head to Mars in order to enter the military medical facility in Cydonia in order to be checked for diseases. We could not risk going to a smaller base in the Solar System and start a massive contagion without the proper containment measures.
It would take 24 more hours to reach Mars, and only six had passed when
we began to hear the emergency calls. First Neptune, the Saturnian moon
colonies, Jupiter and then Mars. Uranus was on the other side of Solar System
so it took other five hours to hear them.
I knew what was happening. The same thing as Pluto. The bigger bases had
more time to react than the smaller Plutonian outpost and actually transmitted emergency calls. It was all the same. Some big black things crawling out of nowhere, crew members becoming cannibalistic monsters. There were actually no weapons in any base since the Unification wars, so those who did not change had no opportunity against the others.
Mars had the bigger base and resisted for a longer time. Mora and I saw the
feeds from the base. Barricades being risen, and barricades being overrun by
monsters. And satellite images of those things coming from thermal anomalies
on the planet surface. Big black things, with tentacles and bodies resembling
humanoid giants. Giant hands and feet, disproportionate and grotesque.
When we reached Mars there was no place to land since the civilian colonies
were also destroyed or overtaken.
“Inna, take me to Earth, please,” Mora told me, with that strange cold expression in her eyes. My girl, my child was looking at me with the eyes of an old woman who had seen too much and just wanted to go home. I called Earth’s command and waited for an answer for 15 minutes. I called again and silence was the only response I got.
When we got closer I scanned the Moon and space stations. I saw the big black
blotches on the Moon and the space platforms torn to pieces. Nobody had to
tell me, this was an invasion and it had succeeded.
It was like the raid of London or Paris. A surprise maneuver and a strong blow
against an unsuspecting enemy. But that was necessary to rid the world of the
scourge of capitalism. To unify mankind and end the threat of war.
Quite the contrary, this invasion seemed unreasonable as it had been effective.
What would the invaders want taking the outposts which were nothing than
science endeavors? They could have taken only Earth’s defenses and claim
themselves victorious with no need to waste resources out there. Why the
humiliation on civilians when they seemed capable of taking on humanity’s postwar military?
And most important, why would some people change and become their pawns?
Why not all of the crew members?
I scanned Earth and saw a repetition of the European invasion all over the
globe. The air was being obscured by enormous fires and those giants were
everywhere. Dark clouds, like starling swarms, were following them, and I could only assume that they were the winged things.
More magnification and I could see people running from groups of cannibals on
the streets. Warships were sent flying through the air like children toys by giant monsters in the seas.
I was shocked.
We floated in orbit for five days, watching the destruction below us. We had to
land but I resisted the idea. Then Mora came with a better plan for both of us.
“We should commit suicide,” she said. Serious as ever. I was scared of her, of
how much she had changed. She was no longer my baby, but a 100-year-old
woman, with dark circles under her eyes and trembling hands.
I said yes and took out my charge weapon, a small pistol we officers carry
around, in case we got stranded in space with no chance to be rescued. I
guessed this was one of those occasions.
I removed the safety and contemplated it in my hand. It felt tremendously heavy and I looked at Mora’s eyes, trembling in doubt so much that she noticed it.
“There’s no other way out Inna,” she said. And then, I remembered, I remembered
the box. The box with the buttons. Maybe I could find a way to close the
door, to send those things back to wherever they came.
I took it out of the compartment and had a look at it. Those were definitely
buttons on it. Big buttons like those of a TV recorder. Mora said “no,” but it was
already too late. I pushed the buttons with a big desperate slap of my hands.
And I found myself here. In this place I don’t recognize, with an atmosphere
of death and decay that seems so far away from any conceivable experience
I had before, under these massive monolithic buildings with strange shadows.
It’s horrible.
And Mora … God … Mora was still on board the ship. I pushed the buttons
again and nothing happened. I tried, and tried and tried, over and over again.
It was like a single shot, like a one-use door to this place. I think I faded and
fell on the ground, with the weight of defeat and exhaustion pushing over me.
I dreamed of Mora trying to enter Earth’s atmosphere by herself and the ship
burning in the process. I saw my love torn apart and burnt to cinders, with her
eyes fixed on me. I woke up in time to see people, or what seemed like people,
coming. I found a place to hide and saw a procession of the humanoid things
arriving at the monoliths, with trophies. Women and children, half naked and
hurt, being dragged to the city of darkness behind me, while the beasts were
chanting something like “Yiah, yiah! Yuggr lagr!”.
And then it dawned on me. The reason behind all this madness. The boxes
were a one-time device for the monsters to use. The creatures were made from human flesh, to be activated when they were needed, perhaps taking millennia and transmitting their genes to their descendants until the right moment, when they were required to loot and take away prisoners with them, back to this place.
And the reason why was pretty clear when I saw the giants arriving too, taking
the prisoners with their massive hands and gorging themselves with them.
The only reason to raid our planet, our bases and stations is to eat. I remembered all those stories of the old gods demanding sacrifice and I knew I was watching them, coming from time to time to remind man how small it was compared to them, and how easy it was to prey on humanity.
We are their cattle.
I looked around for my charge gun and was unable to find it. But it was lost, as
lost as Mora was in space. I had lost everything and wanted to die.
And I will die. I will deliver myself to the monsters to be eaten and destroyed by their gods. And maybe I’ll meet Mora again, somewhere, and I’ll apologize for being such an idiot.
And I’ll also apologize, profusely, for never telling her that I loved her.
End of recording.
Oh shit.
Tsssssssss.
JWWargo said @ 6:36am GMT on 12th Jul [Score:1 Good]
+1 Lovecraftian. I like the idea of something sinister happening on Pluto. Seems far away being on the outskirts of our solar neighborhood, but it's closer than you think. Nobody suspects Pluto...
Onix said @ 9:25pm GMT on 12th Jul
Nobody suspected Pluto, until Mickey was killed. Good to have you back around JW.
midden said @ 10:52pm GMT on 11th Jul
I haven't even read it yet, but I'll be giving you a +1 just for the proper used of "fine toothed comb."
JWWargo said @ 6:40am GMT on 12th Jul
I'm proud of myself whenever just getting its/it's right.
midden said @ 10:45am GMT on 12th Jul
Correcting that is one of my prime uses of the edit feature on SE. Its so easy to miss.
b said @ 6:46pm GMT on 12th Jul
This is just a goofy little story I wrote last year based on a writing prompt of a skeleton in a messy room.

Reveal
Deputy Inspector Erasmus Fabric stood in the doorway, hands stuffed in pants pockets, his long, department issue inspector’s coat bunched up behind him, surveying the scene. Legs planted widely, he turned his head to peer behind him over the coat’s upturned collar.

“You’re sure no one’s been in here since the body was found?”

“No one, sir.” His partner, Detective Janice Window was a few steps behind. She had one hand resting on the pistol holstered at her hip. Aside from Det. Window, D.I. Fabric had cleared the scene so the two of them could work unimpeded. As he turned his gaze back to the room, he couldn’t help but think how cool Janice looked, standing there with her hand on her gun. Almost as cool as his own nonchalant, yet purposeful pose. Maybe even cooler, if he was honest with himself. She would go far, this one, probably even get his job once he was promoted. There was a reason D.I. Fabric and Det. Window were considered the two best investigators the department had, and it wasn’t just because of their keen observational skills.

“Alright Window, tell me what you see.” Fabric carefully stepped into the room, carefully placing his sterile bootie encased shoes so as not to disturb potential evidence. Window followed suit, crossing one arm across her chest and resting the other upon it while she massaged her chin. In this thoughtful pose, she scanned the crime scene. Fabric again noted her body language with envy and thought about possibly placing his hand upon his own pistol as Window had, but perhaps it was too soon after she had done so to work that into his repetoire of stances. Instead he hooked a thumb into his belt and ran a hand through his graying hair. He desperately wanted to smoke, but it wouldn’t do to foul the air with fumes before the forensics team had a chance to bring in all their fancy machines. Instead he withdrew a pen and thoughtfully began to chew upon the cap.

Det. Window began to slowly and carefully pace about the room, stroking her chin, pointing out details as she noted them, her own bootied feet making papery rasps upon the floor.

“Hmm… The victim has no skin. In fact, the victim has no skin, muscles, organs or anything. Just a skeleton and hair. However, there are no residues, as there would be if he or she- based on the long hair and wider pelvis, I’d surmise it was a woman, so from here on out I’ll refer to her as her- if she was killed and then left to rot. There’s no staining from decomp, no bloodstains. No insect activity apparent either.”

Fabric nodded, and motioned for her to continue.

“The room is messy, in disarray, but it does not look like there was a struggle. More likely our victim was a habitually untidy person. At this juncture I’d say that most of the contents of the room are unrelated to the crime and not worth our time at the moment. However, depending on what we find, we may have to catalogue every item in the room. Regardless, as I’m sure you’ve already noted D.I. Fabric, there’s a spilled bottle of pills there,” She pointed to the low table, “Plus, we’ve got a blister pack there on top of the box on the end table. Please also note the large red cross on the box, usually used to denote medical supplies. As well, within the box are more medications or drugs and more on the end table itself. However, without soft tissue samples it may be very difficult to determine if drugs had any role in this death.”

Picking up steam now, she continued. “Empty beverage containers. Poison? Again, no tissue samples, but we may find residues in the containers. Here we have a laptop, powered on and open. The techs may find something we can use there. There’s a phonograph there, and a record. Perhaps a sonic weapon of some sort that dissolves skin and organs, but leaves bones and inanimate objects behind?”

D.I. Fabric meanwhile was making his own observations, ticking them off against Det. Window’s. As he circulated the room, he slipped the pen back into his shirt pocket and pulled on a pair of sterile, lavender coloured gloves. The department was currently out of the white ones, which D.I. Fabric was secretly pleased about because he thought the lavender coloured ones looked sort of dashing. He picked up a book from the low table and thumbed through it.

Window looked up from her scrutinizing and arched an eyebrow at Fabric. Another good move, he thought. “Go on.” he said.

“Well… hmm. I’ve never seen anything quite like this, and there’s nothing similar on record that I’ve encountered, so literally almost anything could be a clue. The chess board? There appears to be twenty eight pieces missing. The gift box in the corner, unopened. Maybe a device or gas of some sort inside? I could spend weeks cataloguing and investigating everything in this room. Maybe it’s time to focus a little more on the victim herself.” Window padded over the green area rug and crouched down in front of the skeleton, her department issue coat pooling around her in a tranchant (as it were) fashion. With a few more years of guidance, thought Fabric, this young detective may even surpass me!

He now had the book dangling in his hand, one finger between the pages, and walked over to the windows and gazed out into the afternoon sun. He clasped the book behind his back, once again bunching up his coat and, he hoped, silhouetting himself dramatically. “Please, continue, Detective Window.”

“She’s in a supine position, as though she were resting or sleeping. Possibly using the laptop. No clothing, suggests she was naked, unless the killer- if there is a killer- removed them before or after the death. Or maybe it was a lover and they were engaged in sexual relations. However, her hair is white, indicating perhaps advanced age. Which isn’t to say that she couldn’t have been sexually active, but I’d say it reduces the odds. We won’t know age, of course, until the lab boys get their chance at the bones. There’s a phone here by her hand, we’ll want to know ASAP the last incoming and outgoing calls.” She stood and puffed a breath of air at the neatly trimmed bangs that hung over her forehead. “I’ll admit it D.I., this has me stumped. The scene is lacking a lot of the usual kind of evidence we use to reconstruct what may have happened. Without a full body, bloodstains, footprints or really anything besides a skeleton in a slightly messy room, I think the lab boys are going to be our best hope on this one.”

Fabric finally turned away from the window. “Your observational skills are top notch, Janice, and under normal circumstances I think you wouldn’t have missed the one crucial piece of evidence that you did. In fact, it is the only piece of evidence we need to solve this case, and I have done so.” He paused dramatically, while a stunned look settled on Window’s face. “When you decided that most of the contents of the room were unimportant to our investigation, you were right. Unfortunately, deciding which items are important and which are not is easier said than done, and you failed to register the one that will allow me to crack the case.” It would not do to smile here, so Fabric masterfully kept his face solemn as he slowly presented the book that he held for Det. Window’s inspection.

“A book entitled,” and here he paused triumphantly, but not condescendingly, “How To Disappear Completely, with a crucial page missing!” He fanned open the book to reveal the remains of a page, cut straight and with obvious care closely to the binding and the page numbers skipping from 183 to 186.

“We find who gave or sold this book to our victim and we find our killer!” Fabric whirled, his coat dynamically flying about and strode from the room, Detective Window shaking her head admiringly in his wake.

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